2 thoughts on “Black Heart – Chapter I Part III

  1. I think the flirty banter would be ok if it came a little later in the story. As it is, it’s a little clunky. I don’t know the characters well enough to know exactly how to interpret this. But that may change as we go along.

    • Yeah I was just trying to give them something to do, and “flirt” seemed like a good idea. But as I wrote the book I discovered that flirting is absolutely not something Bryan would ever do, but Andrade might tease him a bit. So I’ll have to do a major overhaul of their conversations.

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