8 thoughts on “Black Heart – Chapter I Part VI

  1. I’m intrigued by the deck of cards and capturing of the demons. You’re skilled at sprinkling in new information at just the right points to raise new questions, and alert the reader that they do not yet have the full picture of what is going on.

    • Alphas are just the regular “everyday” demons. Do I need to make that more clear? Oh and if you’re reading this, I’m just gonna make you read it all again when I do the third draft, just to warn you XD

      • Ummmm it becomes clear a few posts after this one but yeah, it took me till someone said it. I think by then I’d kinda figured it out anyway. Ok, so you want me to hold off on critiquing this one, then? Not that I can do it till next weekend anyway because this weekend I’m working.

      • Well right, but commenting and critiquing are two different things. There’s no way in heck I have the time to do the latter at work, whereas I can read your posts if it’s slow at work and I’m not occupied.

        I also have to read things twice if I’m critiquing. So basically I’ll be reading this 3 times, I guess. Heh. (I discovered that my blog posts improved when I read things more than once. )

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