Had to stop myself from moving on to the next section to comment. Excellent building of tension in Chapter II Part II. The pacing is well done, and the action if fantastic. A culmination of the warning he’d been given, “If it speaks, don’t listen to it,” and pulling in the ominous thought from Chapter I Part II, “He couldn’t black out. If he blacked out…” I was waiting for that to come back around. But was he successful before he passed out? I guess I have to keep reading. Nice place to break.
Smeared Black Ink 
Had to stop myself from moving on to the next section to comment. Excellent building of tension in Chapter II Part II. The pacing is well done, and the action if fantastic. A culmination of the warning he’d been given, “If it speaks, don’t listen to it,” and pulling in the ominous thought from Chapter I Part II, “He couldn’t black out. If he blacked out…” I was waiting for that to come back around. But was he successful before he passed out? I guess I have to keep reading. Nice place to break.
Thanks for your words, I appreciate them 🙂