3 thoughts on “Black Heart – Chapter VI Part VIII”
When you go back through and edit this, starting with the aftermath of Ivers losing half of himself in the synagogue through this section, you may want to tighten the story. The pace trails off quite a bit here compared with the rest of the story, which has fantastic pacing.
I’m anxious to see where the story goes next, because their situation seems hopeless at this point. In case I didn’t mention it in an earlier comment. I’m glad you’ve returned to writing this story. 🙂
Yeah this part is a mess cause I had no clue where to go. The situation SHOULD seem hopeless, because I was hopeless myself XD I only just five days ago figured out how to proceed.
I suspected that was what was going on. I recognized the tactic from my own writing. I don’t outline, so sometimes there’s just pushing through until I figure out where the story is going.
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When you go back through and edit this, starting with the aftermath of Ivers losing half of himself in the synagogue through this section, you may want to tighten the story. The pace trails off quite a bit here compared with the rest of the story, which has fantastic pacing.
I’m anxious to see where the story goes next, because their situation seems hopeless at this point. In case I didn’t mention it in an earlier comment. I’m glad you’ve returned to writing this story. 🙂
Yeah this part is a mess cause I had no clue where to go. The situation SHOULD seem hopeless, because I was hopeless myself XD I only just five days ago figured out how to proceed.
I suspected that was what was going on. I recognized the tactic from my own writing. I don’t outline, so sometimes there’s just pushing through until I figure out where the story is going.